Join for FREE | Take the Tour Lost Password?
[x]

deviantART

 

Love from long ago by ~losttoon:iconlosttoon:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Rhymes


Falling whirling tumbling twirling
Out of this castle in the sky
Lay siege to my heart, plunder its riches
And let the waves go by

I yell though we’re on the telephone
The fight I thought we laid to rest
It seems you’re a trio, you change so much
Always put my belief to the test

You hold the card to my heart, the key to my door
The fruit of my laborious love
And some day I wish our love was young
When it seemed like something from above
©2004-2010 ~losttoon
:iconlosttoon:

Author's Comments

Okay, I did it. I'm strongly against joining clubs excessivly, but I found one I really liked, so I decided to join. That being said I'm a soon to be (hopefully) member of the Living Poets Society livingpoetsociety whos name originates from, I assume, The Dead Poets Society.... except we're not dead...
Anyway, this poem is my entry to their most recent compitition in which you had to write a 16 line poem that used the following words: card, telephone, castle, plunder, yell, fruit, belief, and trio. I'm pretty sure I used them all... yeah. It wasn't as easy as you might think...So wish me luck^^

Comments


love 0 0 joy 0 0 wow 0 0 mad 0 0 sad 0 0 fear 0 0 neutral 0 0
:iconbetweensmiles:
~betweensmiles Apr 6, 2004, 5:31:40 PM
love the rhyme :heart:

nice work i like this, short and sweet, glad to see you have asked to join, your submission is much better than mine :)

--
Support ~onewordatatime and *suture
:iconlosttoon:
~losttoon Apr 6, 2004, 5:34:54 PM
bah, yours was wonderful. Best of luck to you too! :: pat pat ::

--
Non semper ea sunt quae videntur
:iconkawaiijoe:
~KawaiiJoe Apr 7, 2004, 2:32:56 AM
good job Joe ^___^ being me, I hope you win XD
:iconmoonlightangel:
~MoonlightAngel Apr 7, 2004, 9:01:51 AM
wow...........::sparkle eyes:: that was sooooooooooooooo pretty!!! hope ya win!!^^

--
meow>^.^<
:iconlosttoon:
~losttoon Apr 7, 2004, 5:34:37 PM
^^thanks! I hope I do too

--
Non semper ea sunt quae videntur
:iconlosttoon:
~losttoon Apr 7, 2004, 5:35:59 PM
lol, thanks

--
Non semper ea sunt quae videntur
:iconplotlemmingvictim:
~PlotLemmingVictim Apr 11, 2004, 1:11:41 PM
^^ Very nice. I little shorter than what you usually write (whines because she wanted to read more) but lovely nonetheless.
:iconlosttoon:
~losttoon Apr 12, 2004, 11:10:24 AM
well, it could only be 16 lines, per contest requirements, but I do usually write longer, lol

--
Non semper ea sunt quae videntur
Previous Page12Next Page

Details

April 6, 2004
616 bytes

Statistics

14
2 [who?]
99 (0 today)
50 (0 today)

Share

Link
Thumb

Site Map

©2010 deviantART. All rights reserved
About Us | Contact Us | Site Tour | Help & FAQ Advertise | Services Etiquette | Privacy Policy | Terms of Service | Copyright Policy